Well done for including screen shots to exemplify your points and for discussing how your research will influence your own music video. Targets: 1. Make sure you link every paragraph explicitly to the essay question. 2. Clarify your initial comments on Goodwin - you write about the notion of looking, but this really refers to the idea of screens within screens and also the objectification of women. Look again at the handout from the lesson in genre to help you with this.
Well done for including screen shots to exemplify your points and for discussing how your research will influence your own music video. Targets: 1. Make sure you link every paragraph explicitly to the essay question. 2. Clarify your initial comments on Goodwin - you write about the notion of looking, but this really refers to the idea of screens within screens and also the objectification of women. Look again at the handout from the lesson in genre to help you with this.
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